draft 2 Childhood obesity Extremely fat. It’s a small definition fir such a big crisis. One in four people are obese, so let’s say you have a class of 32, that means eight people in the class would be obese.
Childhood obesity can lead to really (really is slang - can you use a different word)bad causes(causes or illnesses) like diabetes, high blood pressure, heart disease, sleeping problems, cancer and other disorders. Overweight children are most likely to become overweight adults. Most children become obese because their parents are obese or overweight.Obesity is a global thing and it is now affecting New Zealand.
For over 30 years obesity is becoming a bigger problem (does this sound right?). Most obese children became like that because their parents are obese or they are too poor to afford a healthy living so they eat at fast food places like Mc Donalds. (is that a fact? Can you back this up with stats?) Other children eat when they have emotions for example some people eat when they are bored, sad and angry. (Choose one cause and focus on that)
Here are some solutions to prevent becoming obese, first you could exercise and eat less fatty, salty and sugary food and eat more healthy food like fruit and vegetables, be active for 30 minutes or more a day, aim to stay on a healthy diet thought life, grow fruit/vegetables in your garden so you will be more intimidated to eat them. (That is the longest sentence I have ever seen! Break it up into parts)
Childhood obesity is a major thing and is now spreading in New Zealand. (You need to add more here - may be your opinion)
By Ibrahim.
Miss Crawford - This is great start, Ibrahim. But I did notice there were no diagrams - where would that sit on your rubric?
Good copy. Childhood obesity Extremely fat. It’s a small definition for such a big crisis. One in four people are obese, so let’s say you have a class of 32, that means eight people in the class would be obese.
Childhood obesity can lead to bad causes or illnesses like diabetes, high blood pressure, heart disease, sleeping problems, cancer and other disorders. Overweight children are most likely to become overweight adults. Most children become obese because their parents are obese or overweight.Obesity is a global thing and it is now affecting New Zealand.
Obesity is becoming a bigger problem every year. Most obese children became like that because their parents are obese or they are too poor to afford a healthy living. Other children eat when they have emotions for example some people eat when they are bored, sad and angry.
Here are some solutions to prevent becoming obese. First you could exercise and eat less fatty, salty and sugary food and eat more healthy food like fruit and vegetables. Be active for 30 minutes or more a day, aim to stay on a healthy diet thought life. Try grow fruits and vegetables in your garden so you will be more intimidated to eat them.
I think childhood obesity is a major thing and is now spreading in New Zealand. In the graph below shows the amount of drink conjunction in some countries.
Childhood obesity
Extremely fat. It’s a small definition fir such a big crisis. One in four people are obese, so let’s say you have a class of 32, that means eight people in the class would be obese.
Childhood obesity can lead to really (really is slang - can you use a different word)bad causes(causes or illnesses) like diabetes, high blood pressure, heart disease, sleeping problems, cancer and other disorders. Overweight children are most likely to become overweight adults. Most children become obese because their parents are obese or overweight.Obesity is a global thing and it is now affecting New Zealand.
For over 30 years obesity is becoming a bigger problem (does this sound right?). Most obese children became like that because their parents are obese or they are too poor to afford a healthy living so they eat at fast food places like Mc Donalds. (is that a fact? Can you back this up with stats?) Other children eat when they have emotions for example some people eat when they are bored, sad and angry. (Choose one cause and focus on that)
Here are some solutions to prevent becoming obese, first you could exercise and eat less fatty, salty and sugary food and eat more healthy food like fruit and vegetables, be active for 30 minutes or more a day, aim to stay on a healthy diet thought life, grow fruit/vegetables in your garden so you will be more intimidated to eat them. (That is the longest sentence I have ever seen! Break it up into parts)
Childhood obesity is a major thing and is now spreading in New Zealand. (You need to add more here - may be your opinion)
By Ibrahim.
Miss Crawford - This is great start, Ibrahim. But I did notice there were no diagrams - where would that sit on your rubric?
Good copy.
Childhood obesity
Extremely fat. It’s a small definition for such a big crisis. One in four people are obese, so let’s say you have a class of 32, that means eight people in the class would be obese.
Childhood obesity can lead to bad causes or illnesses like diabetes, high blood pressure, heart disease, sleeping problems, cancer and other disorders. Overweight children are most likely to become overweight adults. Most children become obese because their parents are obese or overweight.Obesity is a global thing and it is now affecting New Zealand.
Obesity is becoming a bigger problem every year. Most obese children became like that because their parents are obese or they are too poor to afford a healthy living. Other children eat when they have emotions for example some people eat when they are bored, sad and angry.
Here are some solutions to prevent becoming obese. First you could exercise and eat less fatty, salty and sugary food and eat more healthy food like fruit and vegetables. Be active for 30 minutes or more a day, aim to stay on a healthy diet thought life. Try grow fruits and vegetables in your garden so you will be more intimidated to eat them.
I think childhood obesity is a major thing and is now spreading in New Zealand. In the graph below shows the amount of drink conjunction in some countries.
By Ibrahim.I